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@@ -8,9 +8,9 @@ BUT is it real?
 
 Jen:
 
-"WHOOSH,"the wind blew. I stood on a small sandy beach with waves twice the size of me. The sky was as dark as an empty void, slowly sucking the soul out of my body.
-My legs gave way and i kneeled on the soft, white sand. I can hear my family calling me in the distance, but I can't shout. My mouth was sealed shut.
-A huge wave engulfed my limp body as my consciousness slipped away from my fingers.
+"WHOOSH,"the wind blew. I stood on a small sandy beach with waves twice the size of me. The sky was as dark as an empty void, slowly sucking the positivity, the hope, my soul out of my body. Bit by bit...
+My legs gave way and I collapsed on the soft, white sand. I could hear my family calling me in the distance, but I couldn't shout. My mouth was sealed shut. I tried to make some sort of gesture or let out a sound, at least, to catch their attention but it was to no avail. 
+I took a deep breath and shut my eyes as a huge wave engulfed my limp body and my consciousness slipped away from my fingers.
 
 "JEN, WAKE UP!"